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Post by dgriffin on May 17, 2008 8:56:50 GMT -5
Corner, not sure how to move lube. I invented it because I wanted a tie-in with Father's LaBatts. Give me a rewritten sentence or paragraph. BTW, I changed id's re church name, pedo, etc. And added a couple of extraneous zaps.
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Post by corner on May 17, 2008 9:08:51 GMT -5
leave as is its a riot
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Post by dgriffin on May 17, 2008 9:17:17 GMT -5
Do you want to use your name? Read it one more time.
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Post by corner on May 17, 2008 9:30:39 GMT -5
yes sent u the name in a pm
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Post by Clipper on May 17, 2008 9:38:47 GMT -5
Great story Corner!!! Keep them coming. I have a couple that Dave put up on the "More Stories" forum at Windswept Press. It is fun to write, rewarding to see them on the writer's forum, and reading the stories written by other's is really entertaining.
When you go to Dave's website, follow some of the links he provides to other sites and you will be amazed at the accomplishments of he and other amateur writers, and the possibilities that are out there for anyone interested in writing.
Just last night, I was researching some of the "free writing courses" available on the web. Possibilities are endless. With your background, I am sure there are many stories, from happy to sad, and from successes and failures, that can be told carefully protecting the actual names of characters.
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Post by dgriffin on May 17, 2008 9:42:38 GMT -5
Shoot, I forgot your great lines about the woman choir members. I've worked them into the story. I also changed the ending. New Title? Think one up. www.windsweptpress.com/bendover.htm |
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Post by corner on May 17, 2008 9:53:27 GMT -5
changes are good just pritnted a couple of copies to share got real life stories up the ying yang nothing like a career is state service to rev those babies up.
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Post by Clipper on May 17, 2008 9:56:56 GMT -5
LOL! Great story!!!
;D ;D ;D
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Post by corner on May 17, 2008 13:42:11 GMT -5
thanks guys my brother the tight assed anal retentive newspaper editor didnt appreciate the humor.
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Post by Clipper on May 17, 2008 14:06:02 GMT -5
Tight Assed and anal retentive comes from too long at the OD! Working for Donna Donovan makes one that way! I quit when I felt my Sphincter starting to tighten up from Gannet stuffing stuff up my ass and calling it company policy, hehehe!
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Post by corner on May 17, 2008 14:58:35 GMT -5
he was like that before she came alongstarted shortly after his birth. his son said he couldnt appreciate the humor in it but my nephew, his brother and his mother did...Fran is afraid if you say something bad about a priest, church whatever you are gonna be dooomed to hell.
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Post by Clipper on May 17, 2008 17:27:24 GMT -5
Haha! I should know Fran from Staff meetings and such. I was on the safety committee and such when I worked there, but I can't place him. If I saw him, I am sure I would remember him.
I don't know if I ever told you, but I used to live two doors away from Annie and Pete on Keyes Rd. Lynda and I were friends and I dated a friend of hers. Young Pete got married to Bev shortly after we moved there so I didn't know him as well.
I have an email address for Lynda, and I have touched base with her a couple of times.
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Post by dgriffin on May 17, 2008 18:23:34 GMT -5
Corner, you will run into these attitudes from people who write for a living. I assume it's because they've lost all the fun of it.
Besides, the real value of the writing might be what others' reactions say about them.
Just keep telling stories and writing them up.
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Post by dgriffin on May 21, 2008 21:32:30 GMT -5
Corner, your story had everyone laughing yesterday at the drop-in center where I volunteer. My shift mate emailed it to her sister, a nun, and an hour later we got a note back saying she loved it. www.windsweptpress.com/bendover.htm |
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Post by corner on May 22, 2008 7:15:14 GMT -5
the truth is a defense
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